Thank you for the feedback!
Tried the demo a while back and I like the premise. However, if I saw the Steam trailer without knowing anything about the game, I'd assume the game is a bullet hell game ... that is more like random hell than quick reflexes and memorizing patterns. The gameplays seem very chaotic in the trailer.
Just look at the trailers for a very similar gane: ECHO
http://store.steampowered.com/agecheck/app/551770/ "They do what you do"
"They copy your every move"
"Kill your past selves" is kind of vague and it'd be much better to show the game mechanic step-by-step. Attack one enemy. Then show how it copies you. Then do it with more.
Also, it'd be nice to have a little "motivation": who you are and/or what are you doing and/or why are you doing it. Are you defending from an alien race with advanced technology maybe from a different dimension. On an advanced AI? Doesn't have to be very explicit, but I think it'd add to it. Especially if the game can be completed, then there could be a
final reveal at the end.
Regarding this Reddit post:
https://www.reddit.com/r/Games/comments/752qr2/im_bringing_my_shmup_where_you_kill_your_past/What does
Removed: Rule 6.2 mean? Is the post removed (probably not) or did you use something in the title that violated Rule 6.2?
It is intentionally mechanic first. Players have mixed feeling about this. I think the mechanics speak for themselves and most players who are into SHMUP don't care about story.
However, there is a reveal when you beat the game and move past the deadline
It's a poem. Hope you enjoy.
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because the subject "I'm bringing my SHMUP where you Kill your Past Lives to Steam - here's trailer" is sensationalized according to the mod.
I used to have a trailer that showed 1-3 enemies copying you. You're right that is missing from that now.
The current trailer is there to fit under 30 seconds and showcase the combat. You're right that it doesn't explain it well. I like keeping it short, what do you think?
Because of the simple graphics I like to show the combat fast and quickly instead of spending time building up.. I don't think showing the recording + playback is as exciting. Maybe it's worth 5 seconds in the beginning though. Maybe this can be fixed with different text like you suggested, instead of "Kill your past lives".
I could fit more text in the intermissions and keep the same footage, even.
Like:
"They do what you do"
"Kill your clones"
?
If I change the text, will the footage be good?