Colin
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« on: November 08, 2008, 02:58:22 PM » |
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Last month I posted a video feature of my favorite Indie picks for September...
Readable Here, and well.. I got a bit hammered on the voice work criticism, well I took the advice to heart, reworked the voice and have consequently tried again. Thus the new video is watchable here Opinions again would be great. Cheers |
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« Reply #1 on: November 08, 2008, 03:47:39 PM » |
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:D It's WAY more understandable, but you sound like a mix between Duke Nukem and Mr. Stereotype News Anchor. And it is hilarious.  |
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handCraftedRadio
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« Reply #2 on: November 08, 2008, 04:03:30 PM » |
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Nice, I like it. The announcer is a lot better in this one. Looking forward to seeing the future editions!
(You should get Gilbert Gottfried to do the voice next time, that would really spice things up!)
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Renton
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« Reply #3 on: November 08, 2008, 05:20:36 PM » |
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There's this nasal tone to the guy's voice that I don't really like. Also needs to work on his toning and stresses. And you guys definitely need a better closing sequence. Something like "This has been The Top 5 Indie Games: October Edition."
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ஒழுக்கின்மை (Paul Eres)
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« Reply #4 on: November 08, 2008, 07:30:06 PM » |
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I think you need to work on your enunciation. It's a good effort though, thanks for the video, I found a few games I passed over on it.
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ஒழுக்கின்மை (Paul Eres)
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« Reply #5 on: November 08, 2008, 07:32:54 PM » |
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I think you also sound incredibly emotionless and unenthusiastic. Like...  One of the best games I played this year. I probably wouldn't be much better at doing this, but I'm just pointing that out in case you might find it helpful. |
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« Reply #6 on: November 08, 2008, 08:39:09 PM » |
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I think it should be in the format of an infomercial!  |
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« Reply #7 on: November 08, 2008, 09:43:36 PM » |
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Hmm not bad. Definitely an improvement. Some of the reviews seem a bit scarce on information but I get that it is not meant to be an in-depth review for each game. Keep trying, keep improving. Practice makes perfect.
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AuthenticKaizen
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« Reply #8 on: November 09, 2008, 03:55:00 AM » |
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good improvement.
looking forward to the next episodes and their progress.
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« Reply #9 on: November 09, 2008, 04:11:03 AM » |
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Stylish layout, and whilst it only touches on each title it does hold attention nicely. I dig the voice - though, I was expecting more deadpan humour, I'll admit. His tone of voice has limitless potential for a few droll, unenthusiastic quips now and again. Though, uh, don't throw any in just for the sake of it. Please keep it up. The more Indie Game media, the better.  |
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AuthenticKaizen
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« Reply #10 on: November 09, 2008, 06:01:14 AM » |
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as said the layout with the countdown gives it a nice touch. with the voice its the same as in singing and martial arts: the right breathing technique is essential. maybe check out some some audio programs on this very subject. now i will watch the top 10 2d arcade beat em ups  |
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michael
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« Reply #11 on: November 09, 2008, 07:37:33 AM » |
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i feel like im listening to a basketball game, the voice is better but it still doesnt fit the content(which was good)
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Powergloved Andy
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« Reply #12 on: November 09, 2008, 11:55:43 AM » |
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Great! You did awesome this time! I can't wait for November's vid now. Way to step it up from September's vid! :D
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hershc
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« Reply #13 on: November 13, 2008, 01:51:27 PM » |
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This is a great video, especially as a recap of the month. Some pretty great games in October, and here's to November being just as great.
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« Reply #14 on: November 13, 2008, 02:01:43 PM » |
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Awesome. Pretty top-notch quality stuff, there. Almost everything is perfect. The only suggestion I'd give is for the manly-sounding announcer to have a little more energy. |
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If you wish to make a video game from scratch, you must first invent the universe.
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