Wow, this feedback is amazing! Thank you so much for everyones feedback! I am honored. I will attempt to respond to a lot of the points in order of how they came in.
It's the title, the first screenshot with the road with the tumors. I think there is a lot of more subtle way to tell a story about cancer.
This is very true, everything is super early on and I am just feeling things out. When initially brainstorming I wanted to make the cancer presence not literal at all. But then when I started drawing I just wanted to get something down, and it turned out quite literal. And all the preceding sketches followed in that vain. But I need to stop and take my time to figure out what I really want it to look like. Thanks for drawing attention to it!
It's just personal and it might be really selfish, but this devlog disturbed me a lot.
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I had exactly the same first impression. I also think the combination of the subject matter, title and the images in this thread looks very creepy. Cancer is of course no light topic, but this looks very nightmarish and freaks me out.
Although the game will not jump right into the heavy stuff, it will slowly get into it, I think this is fine to make people feel uneasy, it can open people up to experience a lot of powerful moments. My message is a positive one. But the game will definitely get dark. I had dark times but they made the light so much brighter. And also I saw beauty in the dark. A sense of peacefulness, in a way. There will be much more in the game to try to convey this, but it will not work for everyone. And I think that is fine, I can not connect with everyone. And if I water down to try to reach a wider audience I don't think that is doing the story justice. I think if you give the game a chance it will be worth it. But a thread like this is hard cause I will be showing the whole story out of order, Most everything I have shown is in the middle to late middle, when shit is getting pretty heavy. It will not make much sense as its presented. I will try to figure that out as I get farther in so people reading the thread are not so confused.
But if some parts of the game make me uncomfortable while others suggest that you never wanted to achieve that impression that would confuse me about your goals.
This is such an brillant comment. You hit the nail on the head so eloquently. I have been running it through my head over and over and over, Nudity or not, offer an option to turn it off or not, ect. You make really good points. But I could argue that, you are right in that they are both taboo, Cancer and nudity, but should I try to tackle 2 taboos at once. Its that fighting too many battles at once? Will the Cancer taboo lessen its impact because the Nudity taboo? I still don't know. But I really like your point of it being confusing by offering the censor option. I was sort of mocking the absurdity of the nudity taboo, but I think that is even worse. I ether just go with it and dont give it attention because there is a bigger message being told, or just get rid of it all together. Getting rid of it does not sit well with me right now. But I will still think on it.
The artwork may not suit everyone's taste's
Precisely!
But I do feel like this game feels confused
That's because I am
It is a very good point. I am still making lots of decisions. I have the overarching idea but all the details are very malleable right now. I wanted to get this thread going very early so that I could talk to people like all of you. Although I have confused many, just this first round of comments and feedback has been so fantastic; I am not regretful of showing this scattered project.
That Dragon, Cancer
Yes! I backed this project too. I think it is a beautiful project and we need a lot more games like this to help evolve the Video Game medium. I hope MBJWC will also help
Interesting project and important subject.
Thank you! I am happy to see others interested like I am :D
subject like this is way too important to turn into a laughing matter
Yes! so true! This is something I have been wrestling with as I wrote above in this post.
Looking forward to seeing more.
Me too!! Both feedback from you all, and in the work I will get to do coming up! It is all so damn exciting! Cant wait!