This is a story that i had to write for school but it sounds like a pretty cool idea for a story driven game with tragedy and a twist. enjoy and critique.
Kohl and the Molowanian Space Cowboy Pirate Dinosaurs
January 6 2064: "My name is Kohl and I am a Space Ranger. I fight several breeds of space dinosaurs in all parts of the galaxy. I have been through several years of grueling and strenuous practice, training and hard work. My current health is poor and my sanity is slipping away otherwise I am completely ready to complete my upcoming tasks and objectives. In this segment of my current required video logs is about my journey to the molowanian system to rescue a pack of some of our best rangers. The adolescent feline squadron, better known as "kittens". They were taken by a group of very advanced dinosaurs who have taken the roles of "pirates" and "cowboys" from our not so distant past." Kohl enters his dispatchment capsule and is put into cryosleep.
April 14 2064: Kohl’s capsule has landed and has broken into pieces of rubble of burning food and supplies. Kohl awakes and is very badly injured; he applies a few ounces of biofoam to each of his wounds. “I am lucky to be alive after this crash. Many of my materials have combusted and are no longer usable. I will have to hunt for food on this foreign planet. I am setting off to the base of the dinos. I will be updating my progress in a few days once I make it to their base.”
April 21 2064: “After more than a week of traveling across this planet I have made it to my destination. I have been having severe arguments with another person in my head so it seems that my insanity has led me to develop schizophrenia. Many hallucinations have gotten me off track and lead me to places that only exist in my head. I fear that my brain is deteriorating and I am slowly slipping away. I am only able to make sense of what I have done after becoming lucid and finding my way back to the right trail. I will keep pushing on .”
April 24 2064: “I have been captured and put into an electric cage of some sort. The voice in my head has tempted me to touch the walls multiple times and succeeded in shocking me every time. This has damaged my mind even further and caused more than my sanity to fade. I have forgotten who are my friends and who are my foes. This may cause me to do things I do not want to do all I know now is that I need to escape this cage and get off of this planet” Kohl fiddles with the lock for hours.
April 30 2064: “I have made it into the wilderness and have been attacked multiple times by animals I have never seen before in this planet’s profile. My skin is becoming scarred from their various attacks.”
May 2 2064: “ These animals are becoming bigger, stronger and weirder than ever. I wante- Oh God! Bugs! They’re in my helmet!” You cannot see through the helmet’s visor at this time because of the darkness of the camera’s view yet you can only see Kohl’s silhouette. Kohl is screaming and violently punching at his helmet’s visor. It slowly cracks as he furiously thrusts his fists at himself, and then it reaches it’s maximum damage… and breaks. Kohl falls to the ground no longer able to breath. The film goes on for hours until the camera’s batteries finally run out.
Kohl’s body is found four years later with a broken visor and multiple scars covering his body. Everything from his journey was there except for one thing. The only thing that didn’t match up with the logs was his location. He was not in some vast wilderness with fierce animals and bugs that crawl into your suit.
He was in a cage.
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