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[jwaap]

An absurd/surrealistic story by JW

Maskman has made a journey.









Now that I look at it I see flaws. Practice. More stories soon?

PART 2









I think this part has to end soon. I want to make him be on a distant mission or something. Like story 1.








Now there are two, what are they doing?

Discuss what happens.

[Akhel]

Hum. So... he was a man with a mask, then he rode a camel, then he found a giant, then he sat and drew, then he pointed at his drawing, then he changed his mask and became a kamikaze pilot, then he died, then he ran?

I don't think I got it.

[moi]

difficult to understand indeed.

[Grindie]

It's about time Virtual Boy hit the indie scene!

I quite like the style here, but, like everyone else, I have no idea what's going on. Are you just mental or something?

[Guert]

Well, it's surrealistic and absurd but I'm wondering if you have a message to tell through those pictures...

I find the pics need a bit more finish and the pixels aren't as smooth as they could be. Also, the use of color is inconsistent. Take part 2 for instance. The scenes are alot difficult to understand compared to the first part because you use all colors on the same plane, which doesn't give any depth or detail as clearly as the first part.

Compare the first image of part 1 to the 2 last of part 2. The first one makes good use of black being in front and the other colors in  the background. Observe the ratio of color versus ratio of black on the front plane compared to the background plane. The front plane as the guy in mostly black with whgite and red highlights while the background is mostly red with white highlits and close to no black (you could drop the outline and it would be better). If you take the two last image of part 2, there are no plane definition. There's almost as much black in the background as there is in the front plane and the red color, which is used to tell the furthest plane, blends with the closest plane, creating confusion (in a very bad way)

All in all, you just have to keep on working with these colors. Make sure the image is clear so we can focus on the idea behind the image, not its craft

Later!
Guert

[Derek]

I dig this!  Need I say it would be awesome to see a game made in this style?