I've been writing some dialog these past few days and I gotta say: writing is damn hard. Okay, maybe not writing as in coming up with what to write but how to stylise it and add
character to lines spoken by characters. If any of you have tips on that I'd love to hear them. Or maybe point me to some good reference material?
Some examples of what I have:
A grumpy harbormaster- I'm looking to travel to Marciudad
Look all ya want but ya ain't gonna find anything here. The only ship set for Marciudad this season is full at will not take any more of you landlubbers.
- But the merchant told..
That merchant can tell his fantastic stories til the cows come home but I'm sayin' to ya- the only ship going to Marciudad is at her fullest. Now make your leave.
You then buy him a couple of ales.
* first ale *
Do as thou wilt, I'm not one to say nay to an ale.
* second ale *
Ya'r alright, lad, -hic-, ya'r alright for a landlubber.
You can then ask about travelling again:
- I'm looking to travel to Marciudad
Ya know, -hic-, I might just be able to get ya a spot on the ship. It's bound to.. -hic-, leave soon so ya better hurry up. Ya'r alright, lad, ya know that?
This is one of the most unique characters I have right now, the rest are very bland.
Merchant of Marciudad- Merchant in Oldden sent me. I'm seeking goods.
Oh, how is my dear friend these days? We have not met for what seems ages. Last we spoke was at the Merchant's Guild gathering and after a long round of ales he.. oh, I mustn't bore you with this.
- His business is closed.
Good grief, how many times have I told him to keep a little stock in surplus and not put everything out on the shelves. But does he learn.. You, my friend, you're in luck. I do have some things that might interest you. Just drop by my store. Once you have what you need, find me back here. I might have something for you to do.
* a bit later *
- Tell me about your offer.
Ah, glad you're interested. I have a little proposition for you and while I admit it may not bring the greatest glory, I feel it's the ideal task for you to tackle seeing how you want to build up your reputation. We all have to start somewhere, right?
Any way to improve these? Maybe I should post it in the Writing sub-forum instead.