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« Reply #140 on: November 21, 2010, 03:54:53 AM » |
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Hroon is in-n-out! Just like those burgers they make in California  GO TEAM! |
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« Reply #141 on: November 21, 2010, 05:39:07 AM » |
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Okay, so I showed the script up to page six to someone and they pointed out an inconsistency I had missed.
In the first page, the character who comes to be known as 'crazy' is explicitly stated to be speaking the captions. However, since the captions implied their speaker was the creator of the world and comments in pages two and three (particularly "I'm gonna slap this universe's creator in the face") imply that is not the case for 'crazy', I did something contrary in page six, using that same narrator and implying that the protagonists were his creations. I had by that point forgotten about the note in page one.
It seems like noyb's intention with page one was that the speaking office worker would be outside the virtual world, something which was quickly contradicted.
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If the main character, who's evidently keen to the whole 'virtual world' business, was reading the unknown creator's words in the first page.
Which might be reflected in page one.
If this gets to be an issue with future writing we ought to discuss it.
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« Reply #142 on: November 21, 2010, 07:31:04 AM » |
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I think that "inconsistency" has the potential makes the story even more interesting doesn't it....WHO KNOWS...
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« Reply #143 on: November 21, 2010, 10:10:42 AM » |
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Eh. C'est la vie.
I'll quit me whining.
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« Reply #144 on: November 21, 2010, 11:36:55 AM » |
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I'm trying really hard not to read the spoiler text... Like meth withdrawal-hard.
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« Reply #145 on: November 21, 2010, 05:18:10 PM » |
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Hroon is in-n-out! Just like those burgers they make in California GO TEAM! They are so delicious.. |
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« Reply #146 on: November 21, 2010, 06:45:58 PM » |
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DAMN IT TO HELL my page is going to be completely eclipsed by junkboys
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« Reply #147 on: November 21, 2010, 10:39:10 PM » |
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Hroon is in-n-out! Just like those burgers they make in California GO TEAM! They are so delicious.. agreed and I think that "inconsistency" has the potential makes the story even more interesting doesn't it....WHO KNOWS...
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« Reply #148 on: November 22, 2010, 12:40:08 PM » |
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I think that "inconsistency" has the potential makes the story even more interesting
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« Reply #149 on: November 24, 2010, 02:26:38 PM » |
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Oh, man! This is going briskly all of a sudden. I'm kind of stoked I'm towards the end, I get to see almost EVERYTHING.
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« Reply #150 on: November 25, 2010, 10:25:09 PM » |
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Done! Now to spend the next month re-reading half the script and waiting partiently.  I'm excited! |
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« Reply #151 on: November 26, 2010, 11:57:35 PM » |
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GO HEMPULI!!!! YAY!!!!!
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« Reply #152 on: November 27, 2010, 12:23:32 AM » |
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Crowe has been canned. We now have an empty slot in the writing team.
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« Reply #153 on: November 27, 2010, 02:05:49 AM » |
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Well not sure if it counted, but Yoshimitsu asked for a dropped spot a few pages back: Click |
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« Reply #154 on: November 27, 2010, 05:42:01 AM » |
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lol Just discovered I didn't have a word processor. Downloading Open Office wheee.
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« Reply #155 on: November 27, 2010, 09:26:49 AM » |
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I think that "inconsistency" has the potential makes the story even more interesting
Especially if one strives to create consistency from mutually exclusive material. I have a friend who's a comic book nerd. He explained DC Comics' " Crisis of the Infinite Earths" to me and my head exploded. |
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« Reply #156 on: November 27, 2010, 04:39:32 PM » |
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All DC crossovers will pretty much make your head explode. Marvel crossovers will make your brain atrophy.
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« Reply #157 on: November 28, 2010, 01:04:00 AM » |
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Uh oh, time to get DRAWINK! Expect my page to be finished tonite!
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« Reply #158 on: November 28, 2010, 06:17:21 AM » |
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Ok I've been reading this script since Friday and still am having trouble keeping track of what's going on, lol. I'll probably figure it out later today I think.
I might give in to the temptation to make the comic a giant Al Gore invented the internet joke, just an FYI.
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« Reply #159 on: November 28, 2010, 08:52:22 AM » |
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PAGE FINISHED My hand-made watercolour pages look pretty awful in comparison to the fancy computer-painted ones, but I Think that those people can just go and traditional art is the only form of real AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAASneak peek:  |
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